This weekend’s Trifecta Writing Challenge is to write a poem in 33 words:
Reaching Singularity
on an elevator
alone
with just yourself
life delayed
on an elevator
alone
with just yourself
plus 14 people — but they’re so quiet it’s like being
on an elevator
alone,
with just yourself
Linda Vernon Humor 
Great poem!! and the feeling I know it so well….
Thanks Maryi 😀
Hi,
Great poem. Life does get delayed that is for sure. 🙂
The first thing I thought of when I read the word elevator is the last time I was in one, there was a kid running around pushing all the elevator buttons, and it stopped on every floor, a complete nightmare. A lesson learned, never, ever go to do anything important during school holidays, especially if it is on the 24th floor. 😀
Very sensible lesson, Maggie 😉
Linda you really need to learn how to work your comments!
Stopping at every floor to the 24th floor! At some poiint you probably wanted to get out and take the stairs! Or better yet, make that naughty litttle kid take the stairs AND his parents! HA!
Brilliant! I’d ask the rest of the people with me on the elevator what they thought of it, but they look like they just want to be left alone.
On the elevator.
Ha! You are correct sir!
Of all the places I ever go, the most isolating one is the elevator. WHY? Does everyone expect ,”The Slasher” to get on at the next stop?
Haha! I know Ronnie! And even if “The Slasher” got on at the next stop, he could “have a”t everybody and they probably still wouldn’t say anything! Haha! 😀
This was really, really good. Even the title! Part of the reason that it is good is that it rings so true. Another reason that I like it is the structure and the repeated part. Really nice 🙂
Thank you so much Libby. I’m so glad you liked it! 😀
Love it! Clever use of repetition. It makes it feel like being on an elevator or like being schizophrenic! haha!
So glad you liked it Lisa. I think Peanuts can be a bit schizo which really comes in handy sometimes! HA! 😀
best way to break tension on an elevator?
I wait until the doors close and the car begins to move – then I turn with back to the doors, face the rest of the folks, look at them solemnly and say:
“I suppose you wonder why I’ve called you all here.”
brings smiles every (okay, MOST of the) time.
lovely poem.
Haha! Barbara! Well if I’m ever on elevator one day and somebody does that I’ll definitely come up to you and introduce myself! HA! (Hey that would make a pretty good Trifecta Story wouldn’t it?)
Reaching singularity on an elevator, very creative 🙂
Ah thank you Asifa! 😀
So true, so true. I love the repetition.
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Glad you liked it! And thanks for coming by LetMeStartBySaying!
I was wondering if you were going to give us some ‘100 floors’ (iPhone app) tips. 😉
You gave something better 🙂
Haha braintomahawk! There really is an app like that? I’ll have to google it! Glad you liked it! 😀
I want an ‘alone’ button at home, please. It IS awkward sharing a full elevator with people who won’t talk.
I know Jesterqueen! I guess we just don’t like being in boxes with others of our species. We would make terrible sardines! HA! 😀
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You’re welcome! 😀
LOVE! Story of my life. HAHHA 😀
Pink.
So glad you liked it Pink! 😀
standing
no movement, frozen
people passing like boats in the bathtub, smirking
Paralysis
why lost time stops wondering who if how long
more people hurrying by, snickering
tumbleweeds, candy wrappers, a muddy torn Potty Barn catalogue
wondering if Linda Vernon is at the thrift store
AGAIN
hey wait this is not an escalator
only stairs
(55 words => disqualified) : (
OMG!
Laughing out loud
tears in eyes
feeling the funny
rereading
laughing AGAIN
tears in eyes
Markie
strikes
AGAIN!
Disqualified
Like
A
Fox!
😀